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ch 2 first page break by ~desiwezzzz:icondesiwezzzz:

Categories Literature > Prose > Non-Fiction > General Non-Fiction


As a pegasus rider, I am strong physically and in magic. I live on a mountain in Africa. My name is Nyack.
If a dragon set steps on my land. I will fight to keep it and to keep my family on one land. I will not let us move. I'm strong in my power, I won many of my fights. If I lose, we move on, but I usly go back and fight. I will not give up my glory easily. I stand to the dragon, I do not show fear. I will win my second battle against him.
I don't fight ground fighters because they don't climb mountains in Afica. They know they wouldn't survive the fight against me. They can fight a dragon and win. I will figtht other pegasus fighters to keep my land. We all are like herds, we are all over the world.
©2007-2009 ~desiwezzzz
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Author's Comments

Im describing the powerful characters in chapter two..

This might need fixing but i will do later..

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~Victorraven Aug 13, 2007, 9:14:16 PM
Cool, I love dragon themed storys, like Eragon.

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~desiwezzzz Aug 16, 2007, 5:11:44 PM
really yeah my other page break will be about the main dragon fighter. so yeah i like Eragon too but i didn't read the book i like the movie

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Don't let anyone let you down.. move on follow your heart
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~Victorraven Aug 17, 2007, 6:11:43 AM
The book is at least ten times better, the movie was sorta wierd.

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Life is a Void
There is nothing but chaos that surronds you
Give int the void, for if you fight
only death will await
Join VR
Serve absolustion.
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~desiwezzzz Aug 17, 2007, 9:00:04 AM
is it really Well makes me want to read even though i seen the movie

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~Victorraven Aug 20, 2007, 6:32:32 AM
Do so.

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Life is a Void
There is nothing but chaos that surronds you
Give int the void, for if you fight
only death will await
Join VR
Serve absolustion.
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~desiwezzzz Aug 21, 2007, 8:21:38 AM
k then

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Don't let anyone let you down.. move on follow your heart
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~Intunecat Sep 7, 2007, 2:59:49 AM
I don't know if you want it but here is a constructive comment~

I like your ideas, but in communicating them... you do need a little work. some of your phrasing didn't make sense reading it through once. Your grammar is ok for the most part, but you have very little sentience verity. Yea your just explaining the character but you should still try to use good style so that you keep getting better.

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A potato is better than eternal happiness.

A fallacy of composition?
or!
A dark truth?
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~desiwezzzz Sep 7, 2007, 10:48:56 AM
k Ill try my best.. well i havent started on the others one, but im not sure if i want to keep the story

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Don't let anyone let you down.. move on follow your heart
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~Intunecat Sep 8, 2007, 3:11:35 AM
well after you let a given idea sit for, a month, even just afew weeks untouched and unthought about you can get a better feel if its something you want to go with

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A potato is better than eternal happiness.

A fallacy of composition?
or!
A dark truth?
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